Draw number 1:
A cuple go walking by the street looking some shops...
Then, they stopped out side of the shop and started to look what was inside of it and after a while they decide to buy something...
Draw number 3:
After that, they get in to the shop to buy something...
Draw number 4:
After about half an hour they got out of the shop and the man have a bag in his hand...
Draw number 5:
The cuple follow walking by the street and while they walk and talk a women came behind them, observing them carefuly...
Draw number 6:
The women is a thief and stole the briefcase from the handbag of the women which went walking with her couple...
Draw number 7:
The thief women keep walking in front of them like if nothing wouldn´t happened. The couple don´t realise of this but a man which was close of them did and he tell them about it...
Draw number 8:
Then, the couple start to run and follow the thief trying to catch her...
Draw number 9:
After a moment, the couple find a police man and explain to him about the situation ocurred a few moments ago, whereas the thief follow runing...
Draw number 10:
A few metres ahead the thief is intersect by an "old" women which was looking all...
Draw number 11:
And, for her sorprise and bad luck, the "old" women knew karate and started to hit her trying to stopped her...
Draw number 12:
Finally, four minutes later, the police man and the couple,which came behind of her, arrived. The police man take prisoner the thief and the "old" women receive a recompense for recover the briefcase.-
--- The End ---
1 comentario:
Hi Pamela,
Well done for writing so much here - the story is very clear.
Check through my comments here and try to check for these mistakes in your future writing:
Drawing not "Draw".
A couple were walking down the street...
they went in...they came out... not "they get in... they got out..."
The couple continued walking down the street... not "The cuple follow walking by the street..."
The women was a thief and stole the purse from the handbag of the women who was walking with her partner...
General points:
Check your tenses carefully - you switch between past and present throughout the story.
Use the relative pronoun "who" for people - not which.
Best wishes
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